So, I just re-read
I’ve done better… way better. I usually don’t make those kinds of mistakes in my writing. Missing a word or two, grammar problems… wtf? I know I’m amateur, but damn. Even I should do better than that, especially if I’m going to “publish” what I write. I have done better than that. I need to do better than that. Sorry to those that have read it. I’ll definitely try to do better.
I think Mind the Shadows might need some changes… maybe an overhaul… an enema? I’m not sure what specifically is missing, but I think I lost interest because of some sort of self-imposed “barrier” I could not figure out how to get past. I know it’s first person, and describing what Marek is/was feeling and how he sees/saw things is a good thing. BUT… I’m wondering if I’ve written too much of that “good thing”. I need some more action in it.
Please, tell me if you think I’m right.
I don’t think I’ll change from writing as Marek (1st person) just yet, but I might get a little more “shallow”(???). I’ll try to create more action and story progression versus interaction and, what I think is, character development. Remember… AMATEUR. This is where I could use some help/feedback. Ask questions. Tell me it sucks, if you want, but tell me why you think it sucks. I would actually appreciate that.